5 words you can use in any order: … Gateway Cold Running Black Friend…
Ring, Ring the door bell went who could it be I thought could it be mum,dad or brother or sister even though I have none of them whats so ever. I remember now its my friend she must be cold and its very dark and black outside I will open the gateway for you and as I opened the gateway she was running inside as soon as she ran I offered a drink and a blanket and Ashley and I sat beside the warm crackling fire.
An amazing piece of writing. I like it when Ashley comes
Dashing in cold.
good story i liked it, would you be able to comment on mine please, it would be greatly appreciated
Hi Astrid,
Thank you for your 100 Word Challenge story. It was very exciting to read!
There were some good descriptive words in this piece of writing – I liked the way you described the fire, but could you have described other things in the story using similar words?
Next time, could you re-read your story to check it makes sense? I think you need to look really carefully at your punctuation next time to make sure that every sentence is right!
Keep up the good work!
Mr Hyde
Team 100WC
Willoughby, Lincolnshire, England